Is the title good?

Question

Search Engine Optimization

Hello, please tell me if the title and the description are well composed
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Emphasis on renting a w223 with a driver in Moscow.
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Rent a New MERCEDES S class W223 in Moscow with a Driver
Do you need a VIP car? Order - Mercedes S class W223 with a driver. Transport service, Transfers Moscow. | VIP transport.

Or is it better to remove / add something?

Answer 1

To make a competitive title, you need:
1. A cluster of requests for this page with frequency.
2. Data on competitors' meta tags.
Without it, the composition of the title is like a spherical horse in a vacuum.
From what I see:
1. Ideally, the title should include the most frequent request in the exact form (well, only the morphology needs to be brought to the human one). I guess the main query for this page is "Rent a MERCEDES S class". And why insert "new" here? You don't throw it away every time someone takes a ride, do you? If it is important for you to use this word, then it is better to do "Rent a MERCEDES S class W223 with a driver | Rent a new Mercedes S-class in Moscow"
2. Syntax errors in the description have already been said above, this is unacceptable, especially for such topics. Well, ask the client about competitive advantages in order to add them to the description.

Answer 2

I'll rewrite the answer. Share next time. I thought it was all a solid title.
By title Rent a New Mercedes S class W223 in Moscow with a Driver
Large letters are better not to use New , Driver
If it matches the promoted key phrases, then you can use it. You can experiment with Mercedes with uppercase and lowercase letters, where CTR is better.
By description. Compiled ok. If you are promoting the phrase Rent a New Mercedes , then it is better to include it in the description.
You can experiment with emoji.

Answer 3

I would remove the dots here = Moscow. | VIP transport. = in description. Just for beauty - it’s already clear there that the end of the text, the separator is in any case
And I would be guided globally not by SEO, but by the human reactions of readers.